复旦、交大自主招生英语应试指导及真题详解-第_8_讲：作文写作技巧与注意事项

第 七 讲：英 语 写 作 （二）

大作文

往年试题：

Directions: write a composition of no less than 250 words according to the outline given below.

Sample 1

My View on Playing Computer Games

1. 有人认为学生打电脑游戏有利于智力开发。

2. 有人认为学生打电脑游戏妨碍学习。

3. 我的观点。

Sample 2：对贫富差距加大现象谈谈看法

评分标准

Global scoring

a. Content

b. Language

2分:条理不清， 思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子均有错误，且多数为严重错误。

5分：基本切题。表达思想不清，连贯性差。有较多的严重语言错误。

8分：有些地方表达思想不够清楚，文字勉强连贯；语言错误较多，其中有一些严重错误。

11分：切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误

14分：切题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性较好，基本上没有语言错误，仅有个别小错。

注：白卷，作文与题目毫不相关，或只有几个独立的词而无法表达思想，给0分。

严重错误——语法错误

There are many reasons caused the accident.

The driver of the car no in.

The life is becoming gooder and gooder.

That day rain bigly.

The man who through the street

The car which in a fast speed hit him.

The car which in a fast speed hit him.

I got the place where happened the accident. ————————————————————————————————————————————

第1页

Our city would happen many traffic.

写作注意事项

1. 审好题，想好再写，不要写了又划掉，也不要写完了发现字数不够有写，这样整篇

文章就不联贯了。

2. 把握好文章的重心，一般“我的观点”应该是重心。

3. 注意写作的格式——缩进式或齐头式。

4. 拿不准的词、短语或用法应避免使用。

5. 表达要清晰、简洁，不必一味追求结构的复杂而尽可能多的使用从句，这样文章会

显得很罗嗦。如：The economy is developing at a speed which is very fast.

6. 注意用词和搭配。

7. 检查-s和-ed，尽量避免严重错误。

Choice of Words

1.Three levels of English words

English native words(core)informal(oral)

French or Spanish words

Latin or Greek words (academic words)formal (written)

Examples

EnglishFrench or SpanishLatin or Greek

askinquireinterrogate

breakseverseparate

fireflameconflagration

houseaboderesidence

kinglyroyalregal

manlymalemasculine

risemountascend

timeageepoch

I know thatI am aware that

I believe thatI am convinced that

I have a good idea.A good idea occurs to me.

Causegive rise to

Emphasizelay emphasis on

Because ofdue to, owing to

Stop, endcome to a stop/end

Suddenlyall of a sudden

Oftenmore often than not

2. Connotation of Words (English explanation)

common, peasant, assassinate, gay, acquire, date, property, enemy, problem, issue

3. General Vs Specific terms (overuse of general terms)

beautiful, delicious, famous,

China’s English

小康社会、缘分、丞相、风水、三个代表 孔子、孟子、老子

容易用错的词

1. 词性

lack, serve, contact, last, marry, concern, like

2. 汉语影响

more perfect, very excellent, return back, repeat again, good memory power, listening ability, high quality goods learn the knowledge

常见错误

(1) two predicates in one simple sentence

Every year lots of familys sit at the front of TV wait this game after have delicious meal.There have many people like SFG.

My mother cooks food is very delicious.

(2) Omission and overuse of Be

Nowday people’s life level is arise.

Many person are like watch SFG in the eve.

SFG was appeared since 1984.

SFG is liked by many people.

How fast time was gone!

SFG can divide into several parts.

We very busy.

(3) Comparative degree

more and more better

become gooder and gooder,

(4) Conjunction

because….so

although….but

While

(5) I very like SFG.Very hate

(6) Part of speech

most of we Chinese, make me surprise,

with the quick development of economic and social,

In my’s opinion, I advice to keep SFG.

eating good, drinking good, playing good;

good plays, good look, good use;

I think it dues to the development,

Let’s analysis and discovery the main factors leading the changes.

To men, women just liked clothes. they like it like me like it.

two weeks past

choose, choice, succeed, success, successful, die, dead, death

(7) Choice of words

The whole family assemble to have a dinner.

congratulate Spring Festival,

abolish (stop, give up) SFG,

sit behind the TV to look SFG,

Many people fall in love with watching SFG.

We can elect other programs to see.

celebrate SFG with bomb,

stand in the shadow/shade

mosquito bite/sting

It’s a gay meeting/party

(8) Phrases

in all in; one hand, another hand, third hand; at one hand, at second hand, at last hand; in one hand, from other hand; last but not the last, last but not most; on my opinion; A coin has two hands (coins). Everything has two hands (coins).

(9) Spelling

We can’t cansle (cancer, cancle) it.

SFG is watched by hole word.

happyness,

include (ing) SF, Every student include me enjoys

Poor people maybe very angry (hungry).

eat the soap (soup);

Benefitial

Drived

Dispite

I will adopt to the campus life

联 贯

1. 并列：

and,as well as

on the one hand… on the other hand

for one thing…..for another

firstly….secondly….thirdly…finally

subsequently,then,thereafter, afterward, in the following …

at first,initially,originally

at last,eventually

2. 递进：

Moreover,

Furthermore,

In addition,

Additionally

What is more

Besides

Apart from…

3. 转折

But

Yet

However

Nevertheless

While

Whereas

On the contrary

In contrast

4. 结果

So

Therefore,

Thus

Hence

As a result （consequence）

Consequently

5. 原因

Because (of)

Due to

Owing to

On the account of

In view of

Thanks to

On the grounds that

6. 假设

If…..

Given that

Provided that

Unless

On the condition of

As (so) long as

7. 其他

(1) Sentence adverbs: absolutely, alternatively, currently, undoubtedly, certainly, consequently, subsequently , obviously

(2) PP: in general, on average, in fact, in effect, in theory, in practice, in reality, in particular,

(3) Adv speaking: generally speaking, broadly speaking, strictly speaking, theoretically speaking

(4) precisely because, mainly because, merely because, only because

段落用语

Beginning:

With the development of

As is well known to

We all know that

As we all know

As a proverb says,

As a saying goes

As for… some people hold the opinion that…. While others

argue (maintain) that

Every coin has two sides.

It has merits and demerits.

It has pros and cons. Supporters and opponents

Development

Recent researches have proven/shown/indicated that

My arguments/reasons/ideas will be listed as follows:

In the following paragraph, I will

Firstly, secondly, and finally

Why is it that …..

Ending

All in all

In a word

In conclusion

In short

In summary

To sum up

To summarize

In brief

其他用语

be deeply rooted in

be in favor of

be opposed to

It goes without saying that

The past twenty years saw/witness

Chances are

No wonder

It is likely that

As time goes by

When it comes to

As illustrated/shown in the chart/table

面试：

面试的教授专业领域涵盖所有现有学科（人文科学、社会科学、技术科学、自然科学、学生德育五大类）,每大类组随机抽取1人,组成一个面试五人小组。面试前,教授们将审阅考生的各种资料,包括考生们所提交的入学申请材料和水平测试成绩等。面试时,由教授对学生一对一面试,每名学生都要“连闯五关”,与5位专家面对面交谈,累计面试时间超过1个小时。专家组将从学生博学、社会实践、兴趣、创新能力、时政了解、思想性等多方面考察学生的综合素质,并依据面试结果作出是否录取的建议。

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